Ouch
The all-over idea is good, but your synths leave ALOT to be desired. They sound rather standard FruityLoops-ish, to be quite frank. Also, be sure to tweak the volume on your recordings. At around 3.00, the song starts clipping like crazy. Go ahead, experiment some more with filters on those synths, keep an eye on the volume and re-sumbit, because I want to hear this one cleaned up! It's got potential!